Monday, February 28, 2011

The Finale to "An Easy Pick"

From Bruce Van Patter's "The Story Kitchen"

The story "An Easy Pick" begins like this:




An Easy Pick

story & illustration © 2003 Bruce Van Patter












Picking apples seemed to Prince Fane to be just too simple. Where was the challenge in that?
He saw up ahead a gleam of gold against a rocky hill. As he strolled over to pick the golden apple, he thought about the contest. The king had told him if he wanted to get his own ship to sail into adventure, he had to pick three golden apples in the forest. Prince Fane would have three hours to get them. When he laughed about how easy it would be, his father, the king, added one more problem to the contest.He added a monster.






The monster would also be trying for the apples. If the monster got them first, then there would be no ship for Fane. That had troubled the prince, but only until he saw the monster. It shuffled into the throne room, and to Fane it looked like furry jester -- with three big floppy ears and bad teeth. It was strong, but was short. And to Fane it seemed very, very stupid.Now here was Fane in the woods, about to pick his first apple. He came to the rocky wall, smiled, then reached for the apple. He plucked it from the branch. It was all so easy.
Then strong hands grabbed him around his waist. He was thrown to the ground. With a thud, he landed on his back and the apple flew from his hand up into the air. It came down into the hand of the furry monster. "Fanks," it said through its crooked smile. "I'm too wittle to weach."
Then before Fane could get up, the monster ran off into the woods with his three ears bouncing with every little step.












It's Your Story - hey, Fane, don't count your apples before they are picked!Help me write the ending. Can you think of what will happen to the other two apples? Will Fane get his ship? Will he stop being so stuck up? Can you think of a surprise ending? And... will Fane be golden to get his ship?
Have fun -- finish the story -- and be creative! I'd love you to email me your ending!














Aaron's Story Finishes This Way....

Fane lay on the ground, stunned by what had happened.  Fane's friend, who was watching from behind a tree, came over and patted him on the back.

"That monster is smarter than you think!" Fane's friend said.

"How do you know that?" asked Fane.

"Well he mumbles to himself constantly, and I overheard him say, "and then I'll catch that prince and..." said Fane's friend.  He was going to say more, but Fane had stalked off into the forest.

As Fane walked along, he thought about what his friend had said.  He decided climbing up into a tree and grabbing an apple from up on top of the tree would be a good idea.  It worked.  The monster did not get the apple.

The monster and Prince Fane each had one apple. Who would get the winning apple?

The next tree that had the fruit was not climbable, nor was the fruit in reach.  Luckily, Prince Fane had a throwing knife.  He threw the knife at the stem of the fruit.  The knife cut the fruit off the tree, and the apple fell into Prince Fane's awaiting hands.

Meanwhile, the knife bounced between the tree branches as it slowly fell in an unpredictable pattern.  When Prince Fane turned to go, the monster jumped out of the shadows, grabbed the fruit, and tried to take it.  Just then, the knife fell from the tree and cut the apple in half.  They both fell backward with half an apple in each of their hands.

The monster and Prince Fane returned to the castle.

The king noticed that the monster and Prince Fane had the same amount of apple.  To make up for the fact, the king gave the monster and the prince canoes rather than war ships.

The End.

P.S. The prince went off on many silly adventures in his canoe.











1 comment:

  1. Cool story, Ethan and I laughed! We want to hear about the canoe adventures now.

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